Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some people argue that animal captivity, especially zoo, is inappropriate place to keep animals. Even tough some people believe that it could possibly be beneficial for the animals which are kept in zoo, others think that it would be disadvantages for the animals itself. This topic is debatable, and this essay will discuss both sides also provides a conclusion at the end.
To start with, those who accept this idea believe that zoos are proper place to preserve wild animals, especially the endanger one. It can be seen that in several of zoo in Indonesia conserves lots of endangered animals. By this, it means that the animals would be cared by zookeepers in order to maintain the animals’ life span. In particular, endanger species such as tiger, elephant and rhino are often saw in the zoo. Furthermore, proponents believe that the presence of zoos could possible benefit the children. In order that adolescence will learn about wild animal so that they would be able to preserve the endangered animal in the future.
Looking to opponents’ perspective, some wild animals require suitable place for living. It means that the condition in zoo cannot support the animals to maintain their life. Reportedly, the wild animal activist believes that the animals in zoo are easier to be stressed inasmuch as some wildlife requires wide space for hunting, such as tiger and lion. Meanwhile, in the zoo, animals are kept in small cage. In Addition, the possibility for animals being neglected is higher. The animals in the zoo tend to be saw as display. It means that wild animals in the zoo are considered for entertaining purpose only.
To conclude, I believe that keeping animals in zoo has drawbacks due to getting stress and being neglected. Wild animals should be placed in wildlife reserve since it is a wide place and has similar condition to wild habitat.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... Even tough some people believe that it could possibly be beneficial for the animals which are...
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Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ce to preserve wild animals, especially the endanger one. It can be seen that in several of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, so, while, in addition, in particular, such as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98402555911 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6283543304 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501597444089 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7214900158 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6666666667 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313184573636 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120535207222 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639456519361 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213032599098 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678152828705 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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