Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime.
Do you agree or disagree?
Crime education has evolved into a major topic in many countries. While I agree that asking those who are released from prison to have a meeting with students is a good education method, I also believe that there are better alternatives to warn the adolescents about the danger of committing crimes.
On the one hand, reformed lawbreakers can tell youngsters about how they are involved in crime, the dangers of an offender's lifestyle, and what life in jail is like, which means children would be discouraged from criminal activities and may become productive citizens in the future. However, this way of learning may generate a tendency of imitating kinds of illegal acts in teenagers' minds, especially those who are lack maturity and awareness. Furthermore, it cannot be guaranteed that the ex-offender has completely got rid of their inner desire to perform this activity again, so I concur that they are not role models for teenagers.
On the other hand, there are more effective ways to raise teenagers' awareness than learning from ex-criminals. One option is that police officers can visit schools and talk to young people. They can tell children about so many criminal cases and their sentences which can create a strong influence on children and discourage them from any activity . Moreover, teachers at school also play an important role in raising the awareness of students about crime. Moral lessons may not be abandoned in the classroom, and a positive education environment should be promoted, contributing to crime prevention. Subsequently, educational films might be informative. For instance, the success of a series of educational programs on Vietnamese Television channels about the price that offenders have to pay proves that the narrative forms of crime education can work. It is hoped that a speech of used-to-be outlaws is promoted at all school levels.
In summary, despite the view that people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help teenagers stay away from committing crimes, I believe that this opinion is not the best education method for crime education and the idea of using figures of authority and lecture to prevent school children from the danger of offending is more appropriate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'offenders'' or 'offender's'?
Suggestion: offenders'; offender's
...re involved in crime, the dangers of an offenders lifestyle, and what life in jail is lik...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ts in teenagers minds, especially those who are lack maturity and awareness. Furthermor...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...en and discourage them from any activity . Moreover, teachers at school also play ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, for instance, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20273972603 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79379433935 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569863013699 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.8587978938 49.4020404114 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.642857143 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0714285714 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197319043789 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593974504799 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543667855144 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127833472828 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405839199355 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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