Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that having these people give a talk to school students is the best way to tell them about the dangers of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?
People differ greatly in their views whether talks by ex-prisoners should be held at school to inform students of the threats of carrying out a criem. While acquisecing that this practice is beneficial in a few aspects, I would contend that there are many better methods to educate students about the dangers of crimes.
There are two compelling reasons why I concede that there are certain benefits of having exprisoners talking to students about the hazards associated with crimes. First and foremost, students may learn the dangers of doing a crime to the victims from those who committed crimes. To explain, not only do these ex-criminals have surely gathered knowledge about the dangers of crimes from their own wrongdoings but they also understand from communication with other prisoners. Furthermore, this method may educate students about the threats to the offenders themselves. This is because ex-prisoners are those who underwent a long process of imprisonment and rehabilitation.
However, I am firmly convinced that some crime education methods play a more significant role in teaching students the hazards of crimes. The most important measure is to introduce criminology as a subject at school. A clear explaination for this is that while the life-stories of ex-prisoners are often biased, criminology knowledge is scientifically proven, thus be more reliable than a few individuals’ stories. Another approach is to film the hard daily lives of prisoners and show it to school students. The reason behind this is that films with vivid images are much more visually attractive compared to the talks of those who did crimes.
To sum up, although I accept that talks by ex-criminals may educate students about the hazards of carrying out a crime for victims and offenders, I would argue that some stronger resolutions should be adopted to teaching students these threats, including the introduction of criminology as a school subject and showing films about the life of prisoners.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29874213836 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01839127526 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525157232704 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9834042301 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.615384615 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232438542667 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796913694082 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436248860529 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141282708533 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367520863733 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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