Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

A considerable quantity of individuals are the advocates of inclining the retirement age as a result of the increase in the period of the lifetime.I congently find this attitude unfair and indisculpable to elderlies.
On the on hand, there is a broad consensus among pundits that when people age it is their emphatic right to be provided with happiness instead of working hard and just trying to survive.To be more exact, enjoying the tranquility of the retirement and spending time without being concerned about tension is not something pleasant to be deprived of.According to the Sun magazine,approximately 35 percent of those who worked after their retirement had to face some health issues with a grave significance.This can impose remarkable expenses to the ministry of health and lead to a catastrophic felony later.
On the other hand,as the workers get older they usually,if not always,can not work with the same efficiency they used to have almost a decade ago .To be more precise,it is a susceptible possibility that they would be dealing with some novel matters during this stage of their life which could negatively affect the practicality of the department.Furthermore,the employees who are at the verge of retirement would not be satisfied with a new law that forces them to work longer.This can even have intellectual side effects such as depression and even suicid .
As a way of conclusion,This is my idiosyncratic belief that in regard to the aforementioned cons under no circumstances should the officialdom boost the retirement age.

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Average: 5.4 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, such as, as a result, in regard to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1307.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.228 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.56067882231 2.80592935109 127% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 20.2975951904 305% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 195.91516021 49.4020404114 397% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 326.75 106.682146367 306% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.5 20.7667163134 301% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.5 7.06120827912 262% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183132333901 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939691296826 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355221411846 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939691296826 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355221411846 0.056905535591 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.5 13.0946893788 263% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 0.09 50.2224549098 0% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.44779559118 244% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.7 11.3001002004 254% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.26 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 9.78957915832 317% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 10.1190380762 265% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.7795591182 288% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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