Some think that governments should support retired people financially while others believe they should take care of themselves.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Retired people have been increasing in numbers, nowadays. This stage of life is believed to be given support financially by the government, however, there are others who think that they need to finance their needs and should not expect any government assistance. Both of these views need to be discussed further as I believed that these retired individuals are important members of the society and should be given support from authorities for as long as they need them.
Many of the retired people are receiving pensiones from their previous work in different sectors that offered insurance policy. This financial support sometimes comes from the government’s insurance system if they had worked for the government sector such as public teachers, soldiers, and other government office employees. In this regard, it is axiomatic that the government should support retired people because they had rendered service for a period of time.
Meanwhile, there are retired people who were not able to establish a financial security at their old age. These are the ones who worked minneal jobs, or unfit to work at all. In this case, there are government authorities who makes sure that these individuals are taken care under a social service unit. <Thus,> Rendering care to these people is a government responsibilty inorder to build a humane society.
However, a part of the society is not keen on the idea of government helping the retired ones. This is due to the fact that some of them are still physically and mentally able to work. Others also claim that their families, especially children should take responsibility in financing their needs. For instance, in the Filipino culture, elderly are well supported by their family members and some children even include them in their paid insurances, such as medical care.
All these being said, government needs to allocate budget for social services to retired persons who do not have any support from private sectors or their own families. These retired members of the society have rendered in their own way a service to their nation and thus should be respected and supported in their needs.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...because they had rendered service for a period of time. Meanwhile, there are retired people...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... all. In this case, there are government authorities who makes sure that these in...
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Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , >
... care under a social service unit.
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Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ese people is a government responsibilty inorder to build a humane society. H...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, thus, well, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13105413105 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62870191955 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490028490028 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6985708201 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5625 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9375 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30671312493 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105073368085 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625015977683 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175891827444 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671458130471 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors: Rendering care to these people is a gov...
Line 3, column 448, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...because they had rendered service for a period of time. Meanwhile, there are retired people...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... all. In this case, there are government authorities who makes sure that these in...
^^
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , >
... care under a social service unit.
^^
Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ese people is a government responsibilty inorder to build a humane society. H...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, thus, well, while, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13105413105 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62870191955 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490028490028 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6985708201 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5625 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9375 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30671312493 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105073368085 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625015977683 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175891827444 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671458130471 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.