sport
People have different views about whether or not a number of enterprises promote their products and services through sport and sport stars. While many argue that it is a positive development, I am more convinced that the drawbacks outweigh the advantages.
On the one hand, there are some good reasons why people tend to believe that it is both beneficial for sport and business since sponsorship brings money into sport. Firstly, through sports coverage, sports are able to make the most of their sponsorship to increase their popularity and proliferate the sales of products and services. It is also a golden opportunity for some sports stars like Cristiano Ronaldo, for example, to have gained a fortune from the endorsement of sporting goods. Secondly, as more money is poured into sport, sports stars are paid higher salaries and have chances to access with more advanced training.
In spite of the above arguments, I side with those who advocate that the link between companies and sport has some certain drawbacks. Firstly, it has betrayed the Olympic ideal since companies’ only purpose of using sports stars ‘ images for advertising is to maximize their profit, not to promote sport. Secondly, money in sport has resulted in a win-at-all-cost attitude, regardless of sportsmanship and consequences. Some sportspeople even use illegal substances such as performance-enhancing drugs and risk their career.
In conclusion, I firmly agree with the critics of sponsorship in sport. Although it has brought undeniable benefits to enterprises and sport, it has destroyed the sport spirit of joy and fairness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different views about whether or not a number of enterprises promote their p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 257.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32684824903 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01806097216 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579766536965 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.6831348047 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 114.083333333 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4166666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.597868385952 0.244688304435 244% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254865796848 0.084324248473 302% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128677431709 0.0667982634062 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.403171609673 0.151304729494 266% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100925166787 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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