Nowadays, because of the demand for learning standards, some subjects such as art, music and sport are being dropped from the school curriculum for other subjects like information technology. Certainly, children are suffering as a result of these changes. In my opinion, these changes are not a good method at all.
On the first hand, that dropping gifted subjects from the school curriculum is restricting the abilities of students. Many students have interest in this kind of subject and even are talented in these ones. So, the time of these subjects is the little time for them to express themselves and satisfy their passion. It's so terrible for them that schools eliminate these subjects out of the school curriculum.
Moreover, periods of these subjects are usually comfortable and relaxing. Students at schools, especially high schools who are under the study pressure really need this duration to have rest, reduce stress. So significant that these subjects are for not being dropped.
Even so, I can understand why many schools still choose to remove these peculiarity subjects. Today marks are too important for students to pay attention to others. For this reason, many schools remove these subjects to save time for their students. They hope their students can spend as much time as possible learning for their objective and some subjects suitable for the new era like information technology.
Although schools just want to bring out as many good things as possible, sometimes it can be counterproductive. Dropping some subjects such as art, music and sport from school curriculum, which is bound to spare time for students, is not a smart solution. In my view, schools should balance between gifted subjects and new subjects or main subjects to help students have a great time at schools.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, really, so, still, even so, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19387755102 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67568627686 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517006802721 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0754397856 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8235294118 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2941176471 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398557639662 0.244688304435 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146748531644 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962216682705 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260381684644 0.151304729494 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103802299071 0.056905535591 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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