Task 2 People are having more and more sugar based drinks What are the reasons What are the solutions to make people drink less

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Task 2: People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less.

In recent years, junk food has becoming in a matter of discussion. This is containing the amount of sugar from junk food. In my essay, I will examine the reason why sugar-based drinks are occurring and offer some solutions.

There are several reasons why people are having more and more sugar-based drinks. Firstly, it creates new feeling for people if they drink it. For example, junk food contains carbonated water which helps people feel interested and full of energy when they drink it. For this reason, more and more people become addiction by soft drink. Nowadays, coca cola is very popular drink over the world and they appear in events, parties, holiday or daily routine if people want to drink. Secondly, children appeal drinks which have a lot of sugar. For instance, water always does not have taste that make teenagers feel boring, while junk food is sweet than water. Thus, they demand their parents to buy it for them.

There are a numerous solutions to tackle this issue. First of all, people should limit to watch advertisement about sugar based drinks on TV or the Internet. This is because it can attract people buying sugar drinks. Furthermore, the government should increase the taxes of junk food. For example, the price of coca cola might assign 50,000 VND/ 1 bottle. Thus, the number of people can reduce consumption per households. In addition, the state should educate people about negative impacts junk food. To illustrate, we explain for others about ingredients of them such as sugar can increase a large amount of fat in their bodies and caffeine make their brain weak. As a result, it has caused many diseases such as fat blood and cancer.

In conclusion, people are consuming sugar based drinks. In my opinion, people should drink water everyday instead of drinking soft drink. The role of water in the body is not only quenching thirst and regulating our bodies; water also keeps our body’s tissues moist.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ecoming in a matter of discussion. This is containing the amount of sugar from junk food. In ...
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Line 5, column 22, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'solution'?
Suggestion: solution
...uy it for them. There are a numerous solutions to tackle this issue. First of all, peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93009118541 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35641716198 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0958637285 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5217391304 106.682146367 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3043478261 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73913043478 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380026851397 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117881054626 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11757604602 0.0667982634062 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219890524266 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965032110917 0.056905535591 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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