Task 2: In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that in some parts of the world, people tend to leave their home countries to find occupations. While this tendency can bring some notable advantages, I firmly believe that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks.
On the one hand, one of the potential advantages of this trend is that many people can move up a career ladder thanks to migration to other countries. In some undeveloped regions, it is impossible to find well-paid jobs, especially for young people. Thus, they need to become economic migrants, earn a living outside their countryside, and send money home to support their families. Moreover, it is obvious that working abroad also endows youngsters with valuable knowledge and experiences, which can help them gain a sense of pride from their families and competitive edges when coming back to their native countries.
On the other hand, it should be also noted that there are also numerous disadvantages stemming from the phenomenon. From the cultural perspective, many indigenous people still hold prejudice against economic migrants and their families, which makes them find difficulty to reintegrate into society. Moreover, working in foreign countries also brings several dangers, such as cultural discrimination, in which the migrants are forced to conduct strenuous, labour-intensive, and unhealthy jobs. In terms of the future of the native countries, mass exodus of young people from their own countries to others can result in the disappearance of the traditional way of life, in which ties of kinship and close-knit families will be fallen by the wayside. As a result, economic activity is left in the hands of the ageing population. The loss of young generations in the community is incompatible with the sustainable development of the country.
In conclusion, although working abroad can bring some benefits, I would argue that it can also lead to several detrimental consequences for the migrants themselves, as well as the development of their native countries.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... development of their native countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, by the way, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99989583152 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8404895122 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.461538462 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283611178958 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910089034443 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618795830069 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169781989511 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056220183938 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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