Task 2 Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people in the history of their countries What are the causes Give solutions to increase the number of people to know about famous people in history

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Task 2: Many young people now know more about international pop and movie stars than famous people in the history of their countries.
What are the causes? Give solutions to increase the number of people to know about famous people in history

In recent years, celebrities have become in a matter of discussion. Many teenagers usually ignore famous people in their countries than international celebrities. In my opinion, I will examine the reasons why knowing foreign stars are occurring and offer some solutions.

There are several reasons why many people know more famous people from others countries than the stars of their country. Firstly, foreign celebrities always appear on TV, newspapers and social media. For example, nowadays when people usually surf to find new things on Facebook, there are several websites to post short video about dancing famous people in Korea. It makes people feel curious so it leads to look for information which involve to celebrities such as name, where they live and when they were born. Secondly, international companies invest modern technology and fashion clothes to make music products and movie. For instance, many children in the world know Disney films because it designs many beautiful characters and dubs perfect in the movies. Therefore, they attracted and became fans of Disney films.

There are numerous solutions to tackle this issue. First of all, the government should educate people about the stories involving previous generation of famous people in the history of their countries. This is because it helps people remember the process of classical musician and making movies, learn good their personalities and experience. Furthermore, the government should advertise stars of their countries everywhere such as on TV and the Internet. To illustrate, we make a posters to stick on the wall on the street or encourage companies use famous people of their nations to introduce products. As a result, people can make them to be difficult forget and more respected celebrities.

In conclusion, many youngsters now memorize more about foreign pop and films than artists in the history of their countries. In my opinion, the best solution is that the government encourage schools to learn children the stories which involve previous generation of famous people and require people remember.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a poster' or simply 'posters'?
Suggestion: a poster; posters
...nd the Internet. To illustrate, we make a posters to stick on the wall on the street or e...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ous people and require people remember.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39090909091 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71300138079 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4068657885 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8333333333 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05555555556 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47704697138 0.244688304435 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137659437429 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127522240534 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300448974704 0.151304729494 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422576878186 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a poster' or simply 'posters'?
Suggestion: a poster; posters
...nd the Internet. To illustrate, we make a posters to stick on the wall on the street or e...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ous people and require people remember.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39090909091 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71300138079 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4068657885 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8333333333 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05555555556 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.47704697138 0.244688304435 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137659437429 0.084324248473 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127522240534 0.0667982634062 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300448974704 0.151304729494 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422576878186 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.