There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heared everywhere nowadays?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There are a plethora of music types in the world today. Entertainment and identity for such custom are the reason why people need music in their lives. Regardless of the usefulness of today’s worldwide trending music, I believe that traditional music of a country is more essential to be preserved.
Traditional music appears like an identity to a country, thus, it should be preserved. It is higly important to keep national identity through specific types of music. Certain melody is able to demontrate the character of a nation. For example, in indonesia an amalgam of traditional music is played annualy in the independence day ceremony. This ilustrates that locals music is highly important for cultural recognation as well as diversity of such country. Therefore, traditional music should be preserved because it acts as an national identity.
Others, however, argue that the music which is heard everywhere is more useful because it offers entertainment to society in a global scale. These people believe that sef-entertaining through music plays almost as primary need as everyone needs it after doing activities. Hence, pop music and other international music trends are more beneficial as an entertainment to recover from a tough day.
In terms of usefulness, these two types of music have their own utilities. Nonetheless, in prority scale, nothing is more essential than preserving a national identity through traditional music. Morover, traditional songs need more attention to be kept as worldwide music trends can still appeal in society without any preservation.
In conclusion, I personally believe that traditional songs is more crucial to be preserved as an identity of national culture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39925373134 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07365538557 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522388059701 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7803184602 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.4375 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.75 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439655962563 0.244688304435 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171180427866 0.084324248473 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819841263283 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261753471429 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128590443392 0.056905535591 226% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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