There are many types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is traditional music of a country more important than international music or not?
Thesedays, the world has bunch type of music. But do music really plays a big role in human life? How about a traditional and international music? People nowadays believe that traditional music plays a big role and more important than international music. I partly agree with that statement due to two main reasons.
First, let me talk about the traditional one. Traditional music can be said to the first music in the country. Traditional music reminds people, especially the elder about their young life. They just had traditional music back then, and they enjoyed it. Traditional music consists culture about its country. By listening to traditional music, we can gives new knowledge about the country to our brain.
Second is about international music which has been spread to the whole world. The most simple example is Kpop, music and songs from South Korea. Almost all country in the world must have known about Kpop. Kpop gives us a new sight about South Korea, especially their life and their culture. Kpop also gives inspiration for young people to work harder and care more about their skin so they can be like kpop members, both in the career aspect and the member's outlook.
From that two main reasons, i can conclude that both traditional and international music has its own positive impact. We can't insist in just one side. If we just insist in traditional music and don't want to dare to look at international music, it will be a huge problem. Nowadays, world keeps developing, if we don't open ourselves to the world, then we will get lost behind. But also, if we just insist in international music and neglect traditional music, by the time past, we will forget about our own culture. So people needs to know about both international and traditional music for their best.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87908496732 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60373035561 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516339869281 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1724177112 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.8636363636 106.682146367 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9090909091 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36363636364 7.06120827912 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 3.4128256513 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.515180875575 0.244688304435 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193807054642 0.084324248473 230% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129991211238 0.0667982634062 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.350262961261 0.151304729494 231% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132483415998 0.056905535591 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.0946893788 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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