These days some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, people with different desires and reasons, attend in various events such as sport. The question is whether spend money providing ticket is a positive development or not. For the following reasons, the positive effect overweight the negative one.
There are benefits galore, the most beneficial of which is the economic prosperity as a result of the money spectaculars paid for tickets. As an instance, assume a world-wide sport events, the Olympic which is high demanded with no doubt. Regarded such an approach, the budget allocated for this is sufficient to employ thousands of people, increasing human resources as well. Only then would many jobs as a peripheral consequences, form to provide services toward the event. Not only would the employment growth but also there is a significant improve of infrastructure to be used by other generation which this refer to a developmental of country positively.
On the flip side, some are of the idea that allocating a considerable portion of budget for such a luxurious programs while there are myriad of challenges in country as tackling poverty and relevant issues is not reasonable. Taking place of events may increase the gap between socioeconomic classes that the higher economic level becomes rich and richer. However, there are evidence that worker employment can straightly effect people with lower socioeconomic level by receiving salary.
In conclusion, spending money on tickets is advantageous for communities in two ways, decreasing of unemployment rate by providing the opportunity of employment by government or self-business and development of infrastructure which is regarded as a public resources. All in all, these taken actions are regarded as a positive development for country.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 24.0651302605 25% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43430656934 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13331104851 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591240875912 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9903837897 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.538461538 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185968282609 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646894665175 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626703616796 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117643759199 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754612514455 0.056905535591 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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