Today, many young people spend too much of their free time at shopping malls. This can be considered negative for young people and society generally. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is prevalent that a wide range of the young devote too much of their free time to shopping. I partly agree with this opinion since the lack of time for relationships and the negative ramification of their study; however, this is also an encouragement towards the national economy.
The main justification for why I believe shopping has a harmful effect on young people and the general public is that this can decline the time for relationships.
those tend to ignore the connection between members of the family or with friends. For instance, they prioritize going to the shopping mall over gathering with family or hanging out idly with friends which may isolate them from people around.
In addition, rampant consumerism among young people may trigger negative influences on their studies. If they spend most of their time shopping, they will not concentrate on either their schoolwork or the knowledge absorbed at school. This may lead to bad academical performance at school, extremely this also has a negative influence on the quality of the next generation of society.
However, this phenomenon somewhat stimulates the national economy. Specifically, this contributes a huge amount of consumption as well as brings significant revenue for commercial businesses which results in numerous increasing in government tax. Moreover, the rapidly rising demand for customers also requires an abundant workforce that create employment opportunities for worker.
In conclusion, I partly agree that being addicted to shopping engenders adverse impacts on young people and the public. This is because it shortens the young’s time for family and badly affects their health. Nevertheless, it promotes government finance. I also feel that young people should be aware of the risks of their demands and parents are responsible to care for and control their children’s abnormal behavior.
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- Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities for example helping at home or at work Others believe that outside of school children should be free to enjoy their lives Discuss both views and give your own opinion 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: public
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Suggestion: Those
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rol their children’s abnormal behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38851351351 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92077760829 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587837837838 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.878342321 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436006402823 0.244688304435 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134824734359 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809618150039 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218965273501 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085629209347 0.056905535591 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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