we are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? is it good for us to reply so much on computers?
In this day and age, there are more and more people counting on advanced technology in life. I contend that the future would witness the upward trend in this situation, which bring about drawbacks rather than benefits to the society.
The dependence of people on computer-based technology would rise for some reasons. Technology facilitates ways of living and communicating with each other. At the touch of a button, people could have a talk with someone on the other side of the world via a video call, which is identical to face-to-face conversation. So, people could attend a meeting, a class or an interview in anywhere having the reception or Wi-fi connection. Moreover, in recent years, many technology company have poured money into the development of technology in order to help people control their life in hand. For example, Google, one of the largest technology company in the world, introducing “smart home”, which is an application on smart phone allow users to turn on or off all the devices in their house such as lights, washing machine, air-conditioner and so on. Thanks to advanced technology, people make their own living more convenient.
In my opinion, being more reliant on technology is a negative development of human society. Firstly, If people overuse technology on a daily basis, it does bad to their physical and mental health. For example, starring at the screen of computer or smart phone, people’s eyesight and mind would take a turn for the worse. Moreover, because technology could be of some help in many ways, people tend to be sluggish in movements. That lead to a sedentary lifestyle, which is a salient factor for obesity. Secondly, there is an increase in the unemployment rate. This could be because computers could take people’s position in service industries. For example, in a developing country such as Viet Nam, at the airport, customers can make a purchase on tickets and check-in by themselves on the big touch screen without any instructor and ticket seller.
In conclusion, there are many reasons showing that computer-based technology is becoming more important in life. But this is clearly more of a negative than a negative development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...end in this situation, which bring about drawbacks rather than benefits to the so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18559556787 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9808102168 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540166204986 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2417009023 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109112874538 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397529980249 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545509832941 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0694781484749 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300119670216 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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