We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should
only be concerned with our own communities and countries.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some people believe that we should not help people in other countries
as long as there are problems in our own society. I disagree with this view
because I believe that we should try to help as many people as possible.
On the one hand, I accept that it is important to help our neighbours and
fellow citizens. In most communities there are people who are
impoverished or disadvantaged in some way. It is possible to find
homeless people, for example, in even the wealthiest of cities, and for
those who are concerned about this problem, there are usually
opportunities to volunteer time or give money to support these people. In
the UK, people can help in a variety of ways, from donating clothing to
serving free food in a soup kitchen. As the problems are on our doorstep,
and there are obvious ways to help, I can understand why some people
feel that we should prioritise local charity.
At the same time, I believe that we have an obligation to help those who
live beyond our national borders. In some countries the problems that
people face are much more serious than those in our own communities,
and it is often even easier to help. For example, when children are dying
from curable diseases in African countries, governments and individuals
in richer countries can save lives simply by paying for vaccines that
already exist. A small donation to an international charity might have a
much greater impact than helping in our local area.
In conclusion, it is true that we cannot help everyone, but in my opinion
national boundaries should not stop us from helping those who are in
need.
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...stop us from helping those who are in need.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1381.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93214285714 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62157453856 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539285714286 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 418.5 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4067604673 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.083333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252234055064 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10232497856 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653956433964 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692595611575 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580660983224 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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