When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When designing a building, the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people argue that architects should concentrate the function of buildings instead of its outside form. While the building needs to serve its intended purposes, I believe that the appearance of building is also one of the key factors in design.
On the one hand, the function of the building is, of course, very important. High-rise buildings which concentrate in urban cities is the best solution to solve housing problems. A lot of people move to large cities to seek great career opportunities and as an inevitable consequence is the increasing of population density. Therefore, some urban dwellers may not have houses to live if cities do not have multi-storey buildings. For example, in Ho Chi Minh City, there are a lot of apartment buildings are being used for renting even though they are really eyesore.
On the other hand, I believe that when architects design the building, they should also consider about its appearance. It is a necessary factor if the owners want to attract customers in the business. It can become a place where they can earn an enormous estate income because of developing tourism industry and commercial services. For instance, Bitexco building was not only the highest building but also the famous and representative structure in Ho Chi Minh City before being replaced by another building.
In conclusion, the function and appearance play equal role in the design of buildings. In my opinion, we should consider to balance between the outward appearance and intended use of buildings.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1276.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.104 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83153668526 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.6321997231 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.1538461538 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203684047647 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067635990157 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591882562922 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123345048407 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452420405806 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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