Writing task 2 : According to an international travel magazine, many tourists today fly straight to their holiday resort and almost never leave it. Unlike tourist in the 1960s and 70s, they return home with no experience of the local culture. Why do you think this happen? How was tourism different in the past?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It can be demonstrated by recent survey that nowadays, many vacationers tend to have a holiday in luxury resorts rather than traveling around to experience about the culture. Meanwhile, from 1960s to 1970s, tourists was interested in broadening their knowledges about culture where they went. There are multiple reasons to explain this trend, and there are significant changes between tourists nowadays and tourists in the past.
There are some reasons why holidaymakers like staying in hotel. However,the first answer is about their safety.In lieu of going everywhere with many dangers around, vacationers like enjoying in the resorts because they are protected by the security services. For example, when travelling,you can get in the trouble with tourist traps such as virtual ticket that make many people lose money or you can face the risk of robbery,chopping price, having an accident,etc.Moreover,exploring culture is not suitable for family vacation because it is too dangerous for children and old people.
The second reason is that tourists want to relax, not explore.At the moment, holidaymakers just want to get away from the city to chill out after working hard so the convenience of the luxury hotel is the best choice for them to loosen up their tension.Luxury resorts can meet all criteria of the vacationers..About food,they have amazing in-house restaurants and bars. Because of that, you don’t have to go far for food and save time for doing another activities. Especially,hotels have lots of amenities like TV,spacious desk,minibar,towels,slippers,etc.Because of that, you do not have to prepare anything except clothes and money . Also its convenience and material adequacy make customer feel like at home and they do not to go outside.
In the past, people used many kind of transportation that were very cheap like bus, steam train. It would take people a lot of time to get there, especially when you travel very far.After a long day of travelling by public transport, everyone tend to feel tired and is not fine enough to enjoy their vacation anymore.About fees , the fee of a tour that you have to pay is actually cheaper than at the moment , because it did not comprise some well-done services to provide you a perfect trip like now such as accommodation,insurance fee,transportation fees,meals,visa,… also known as package tour. However,the prices maybe increase if you travel by yourself.Moreover,since the increasing of global tourism affected the economic prosperity,people have created many amazing inventions ,espeacially e-commerce websites liken Agoda,Tripvisor,etc so you can booking rooms online. Life and travelling at this moment is more modern and convenient than the past .
In my conclusion,the result from increased tourism partly changed the travelling style of resident.Because of that, there are many differences between the past and now.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, while, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 41.998997996 188% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 1615.20841683 151% => OK
No of words: 449.0 315.596192385 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43875278396 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.92912790446 2.80592935109 140% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576837416481 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 506.74238477 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.657016189 49.4020404114 244% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.8 106.682146367 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9333333333 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 41.0 5.01903807615 817% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189444692389 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670366725529 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352979269961 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111847829021 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0568281780599 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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