Dear Madam,
I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement for a child Card-taker in an Australian magazine.
Firstly. I am doing my master's at the University of Melbourne where I have only morning classes henceforth looking for some part-time job so that I Can able to manage Some of the expenses on my own.
If I talk about myself, I am the elder sibling in my family so from my earlier days I used to take care of my brothers and sisters. Evermore I love the children so I was doing babysitting in my hometown with 4 different juveniles when I was doing my bachelors, for this reason, I reckon my self as the suitable person your advert.
However, I have been moved to Australia for my studies where i am working on a project which is about the "Children's life "so, in this free time, a part-time Job will also be beneficial for me in my education
Awaiting your positive response
yours faithfully,
Sarah Charin
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...t-time job so that I Can able to manage Some of the expenses on my own. If I talk about ...
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Line 9, column 62, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...moved to Australia for my studies where i am working on a project which is about ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, so, i reckon
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 1615.20841683 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 169.0 315.596192385 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67455621302 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86601956289 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 176.041082164 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633136094675 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 506.74238477 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.2466032782 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.0 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8 20.7667163134 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127724334667 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871364362031 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749348700328 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913436367142 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812729414181 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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