Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, technology)
To watch extent do you agree or disagree?
It is undeniable that people are running after many fashion trends, especially young people because the society are developing day by day so a lot of new trends will appear and attract young people. Some arguments may think that it’s totally fine if they want to become flashier and more fashionable in front of other people. But the other assume that they spend too much money and time following fashion trends. And I agree that this young generation are wasting too much money and time to run after the latest fashion trend.
First and foremost, youth is a very important time of your life. In this time young people should invest in themselves and build up a strong range of knowledge and life skill so they can be confident with every situation. And instead of using that money that they have earned to buy trendy clothes or technology, they can use it to invest or trade on the stock exchange or buy more books to read to enhance their knowledge and imagination to a higher level. Secondly, there is nothing to be ashamed of when young people are wearing old clothes or using old-fashioned technology, because they can use that time and money focus on more vital things such as their future, their career to reach their goals. For example, if a boy want to be a doctor, between some trendy clothing, technology and some reference medical book, that boy would choose the second choice because he has defined himself as a future doctor so he has to spend their time and money to achieve his dream.
Thirdly, young people should only spend their time to something that help them to make money not something that take their money out of pocket. Because they have a lot of fees to pay such as the house rent, the electricity bill, the water bill and even their high school/university fee. If they continue spending money on trendy fashion like clothing or technology, they will be in lack of money and don’t have enough money to pay for all those kinds of fees. Finally, young people don’t have to wear trendy clothing or buy trending technology because after a short period, they will be “out of trend” so they only need to choose causal clothing or affordable technology because they will last for a long time and no one will judge them for their normal sense of fashion. For instance, a university boy brought a white T-shirt and a trendy color shirt which was very hot at that time. For the first two weeks, the boy only wore his trendy color shirt because it is a very popular shirt but a few years later, it is no longer suitable for young people so his white old T-shirt is more likely a safe option for him to wear for the rest of his life because it is normal and comfortable.
In conclusion, young people should use their youth to do more helpful things instead of spending all their money on fashion trends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'by'?
Suggestion: by
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 508.0 315.596192385 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5905511811 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32623866419 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452755905512 0.561755894193 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0100288812 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.75 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.75 20.7667163134 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284220993697 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119448760543 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970183195666 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206530971803 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745939533967 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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