The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?
Living standard is developed over the time that cause the increasing in service sector such as restaurants, polyclinics and shopping mall. Youngsters nowadays spend much their free time go to shopping centers for buying items and using utility services. Some people claim that shopping activities would bring the negativity to teenagers and society because people usually pick up the trend. From my point of view, I strongly agree with the statement that shopping as pastime activity cause bad affect to the youth.
Firstly, teenagers usually compare their life style with other people especially celebrities. Because of their immaturity, they spend much money to keep up the trend like their idols. Fashion is perspective that the youth care most about. For example, when celebrities wear new clothes, accessories or using personally made cosmetics and these items will effect adolescents' curiosity. They trying to copy these iconic appearances and they spend to much to be in economic problems. Secondly, when people buying too much matter they cannot use them as pretend. Some attire or cosmetics are throw away and that waste much money and time. They can use these payment and time for better activities such as charity, extra curriculum and sport. Moreover, people can be object for evil person attack because of their lack of awareness. For instance, purchase fake product or take part in illegal system that not only harm them self but also effect society.
On the other hand, shopping mall could be a great place for people to go. For example, families can go to the malls at the weekend for meals, buying food, watching movies or to enjoy the air conditioner in hot days. Furthermore, shopping mall can be a place for people develop their relationship by take part in some activities at complex.
In conclusion, although shopping mall can be a wonderful place for families at the weekend, killing time and cash at mall every free time is a bad aspect that the young need to be educated about its harmful effects and implications.
- The first line graph shows the average world oil price for each year from 1970 to 2005 The second chart shows the top seven oil exporting countries and how much they export each day 61
- The graph below shows the percentage of immigrants to Australia from five countries in 1962 1982 and 2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 87
- This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for five countries There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005 79
- Nowadays it is not only large companies that can make films Digital technology enables anyone to produce films Do you think it is a positive or negative development 80
- Some people focus on news in their country while others think it is more important to be aware of international news Discuss both views and give your opinion 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...lly made cosmetics and these items will effect adolescents curiosity. They trying to c...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...these iconic appearances and they spend to much to be in economic problems. Second...
^^
Line 3, column 649, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this payment' or 'these payments'?
Suggestion: this payment; these payments
...waste much money and time. They can use these payment and time for better activities such as ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05325443787 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55400854154 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565088757396 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8576461802 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8888888889 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7777777778 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119901124669 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0409410965115 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0318819619162 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0809461104609 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358883221525 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.