After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y

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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.
Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:
• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would you prefer? • Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

Dear Sir,
I am writing to you in reference requesting for an internal movement to a different department within the organization. Let me explain in detail.

As you are aware that I have been associated with Project Management department for three years. However, recently I have completed post-graduation diploma in sales and marketing from IMT University thus I believe it is the right time to change my role and responsibilities.

Since my recently acquired educational qualification, domain knowledge and my personal interest lies with the sales, therefore, I would prefer to move to the sales department. Additionally, I believe that I would be able to use my skills and knowledge for the generating and increasing the overall revenue and profitability of the company moreover I am also aware of the existing process and workflows which will make this transition easier for the new role.
I hope you grant permission for internal transfer.
Yours sincerely
Ben

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for internal transfer. Yours sincerely Ben
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 41.998997996 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 824.0 1615.20841683 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 155.0 315.596192385 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31612903226 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 4.20363070211 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27335282389 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 176.041082164 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670967741935 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.3489774686 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194235543285 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828846102287 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599532011701 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101026875138 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264240393105 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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