After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would y

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After working in your department for over 3 years, you feel the need to switch your department.
Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department. In the letter mention:
• Why do you want to switch departments? • Which department would you prefer? • Why do you think you are a good fit in that department?

Dear Sir,
Hope you are doing well. I am writing in reference requesting for mobility to another department. Let me explain the reasons for the subtle change.
As you are aware that before joining Zeta Wireless I had an experience of nearly 8 years in the technical domain. Although working as Solution consultant with a Zeta has not only provided valuable insights on the technical side but also on commercial aspects of business transactions hence I believe that it is a right moment to change my department as the present role is becoming monotonous and less challenging.

The role I am interested in is in the sales department as I always had a keen interest to work in a sales function. I believe with a strong techno-commercial knowledge of satellite market specifically in Asia I would be able to immensely contribute and increase business transactions which will help the company not only in increasing overall revenue but also increase the penetration index. Additionally, I know most of the vendors in the satellite industry so this relationship will help in increasing the overall profits on deals.
Thus I look forward to your approval on the change in the department.
Yours sincerely
Ben

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well. I am writing in...
^^^
Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lain the reasons for the subtle change. As you are aware that before joining Zeta ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...reasing the overall profits on deals. Thus I look forward to your approval on the ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nge in the department. Yours sincerely Ben
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1010.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 201.0 315.596192385 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02487562189 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10560159523 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616915422886 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.5067757054 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193663107102 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787368603745 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567157741436 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117726860702 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560817771385 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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