Being a celebrity – such as famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
EVERY COIN HAS TWO SIDES, SO DOES THE LIFE’S OF FAMOUS PERSONALITIES. THE ACCLAIMED HIGH END SUCCESS OF THESE PROFESSIONS HAS PROFOUND DRAWBACKS AS WELL. THIS ESSAY WILL ELABORATE THE BENEFITS AND ISSUES OF THE PROTAGONISTS.
MAJORITY OF THE PEOPLE WILL AGREE TO THIS THAT SUPERSTARS HAVE THE PRIVILEGE TO EXPERIENCE HEAPS OF ADVANTAGES DUE TO THEIR PROFESSION. FIRST AND FOREMOST FAME IS THE SHOOTING STAR IN THIS STREAM. ACTORS/ ACTRESSES ARE PUBLICISED FOR EVERY DEBUT AS THIS ACTS AS THE BACKBONE OF THEIR BUSINESS. AS A RESULT OF THIS, THEY BECOME FAMILIAR FIGURES AND ARE RECOGNISABLE WORLDWIDE. SECONDLY, SPORTS PERSON ARE ANOTHER MAJOR GROUP THAT COMES UNDER THE TITLE OF PUBLIC FIGURES. ALONGWITH THEIR PROFOUND HARDSHIPS THEY RECEIPT THE OPPORTUNITY TO REPRESENT THEIR COUNTRY/STATE. THIS GOLDEN CHANCE ACTS AS SHOOTING STAR OF THEIR JOB. THIRDLY, CHERRY ON THE CAKE IS THE HIGHLY PAID SALARIES. THIS HAS BEEN A KNOWN FACT THAT WELL KNOWN PERSONALITIES HAVE A HEAVY BANK BALANCE. EVERY PROJECT OR MATCH THAT THEY GOT APPOINTED FOR, DEMANDS MONEY IN ENORMOUS AMOUNT. THIS IS BECAUSE OF THEIR INFLUENCIAL PERSONALITY AND INCREASE IN DEMAND.
NEVERTHLESS, EVERY GLAMOROUS WORLD HAS ITS DARKER SIDE AS WELL. SINCE THESE PROTAGONISTS ARE KNOWN WORLDWIDE, AN EYE IS KEPT ON THEM EVERY MOMENT. PUBLIC INTEREST FOR SUCH FIGURES PUT A DRIVING FORCE ON MEDIA TO CAPTURE AND DISPLAY THEIR MOVEMENT FREQUENTLY. FURTHERMORE, THE PERSONALITIES ARE OBLIGATED TO SHOWCASE EACH APPEARANCE IN A PERFECT MANNER TO THROW A POSITIVE IMPACT ON AUDIENCE. THEREFORE, IT DETERS THEM TO MOVE AROUND AND LIVE A LIFE NORMALLY.
I BELIEVE THE MERE ISSUE OF RESTRICTED MOVEMENTS CAN BE OVERLOOKED BY THE TREMENDOUS UPGRADATION IN STANDARD OF LIVING. A RECENT SURVEY CONDUCTED BY INDIAN PSYCHOLOGY DEPARTMENT, THEY STATE THAT FAMOUS PERSONALITIES COME UNDER THE HEADING OF PEACEFUL LIFE STAGE. SO, IN MY OPINION THEIR DEMERITS IN THIS STAGE ARE NEGLIGIBLE IN COMPARISON TO THE BUNDLES OF MERITS.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...S HAVE THE PRIVILEGE TO EXPERIENCE HEAPS OF ADVANTAGES DUE TO THEIR PROFESSION. F...
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Message: Consider replacing "IN A PERFECT MANNER" with adverb for "PERFECT"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...E OBLIGATED TO SHOWCASE EACH APPEARANCE IN A PERFECT MANNER TO THROW A POSITIVE IMPACT ON AUDIENCE....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27444794953 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92344785883 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1900216372 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.0 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4090909091 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0768822129904 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0219970664689 0.084324248473 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0166529546588 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0468727871653 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00330262898008 0.056905535591 6% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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