Being a celebrity – such as a famous film stars or sports personality – bring problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
The price of fame which frequently generates a great deal of heated debate, has now become even more controversial. While some people maintain that being stars leads to various problems, in my opinion, I believe that it creates much benefits.
At the outset, there are a myriad of reasons why become famous is good. In fact, many people try to become famous. The reason explaining this fact is that people can make money from their fame. For example, if a singer can attract more people, they will have chance to get more performance contract which give them better income. Moreover, famous people often have a good position in the society. Actually, people often feel content when their name is well-known by more people.
On the other hand, there are some problems with the famous person. First, they have too much people following, so every time they appearance in the public, they are surrounding by the crowd. Sometime those bring only the trouble since it affect one’s daily activities. Another point to be taken into consideration is that celebrities must keep their image every time they go out or in every event. As the result, they need to spend a lot for fashion, jewelry or cosmetics. Actually, it cost a large amount of well-known people’s income.
In conclusion, from a personal perspective, I’m inclined to believe that it is greatly beneficial to become famous. However to enjoy the convenience that fame brings to, people need to deal with the difficulties that may affect their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
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Suggestion: many
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Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60798765396 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625984251969 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6179030504 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.375 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.875 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182577716151 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540694168902 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040997913549 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100311360458 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164238684911 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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