Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business bring about the death of local communities.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In Kazakhstan, there is an issue in society about what type of impact the closure of regional businesses due to the widespread of shopping malls have on the regional community. Some sociologists believe that the impact would lead to the destruction of local communities. This essay disagrees with this point of view for the following reasons.
The first reason is the poor connection between the closure of regional business and local groups of people. Apart from local companies, there are many other aspects of society that unit people into groups, such as local traditions, customs, language and history. These components of society can withstand even if local business is completely shut down. For example, in Karaganda city, even though multinational companies entered and swallowed almost all small companies in the region in 2002, regional congregations not only have survived from their entry, but also have thrived so far.
However, some sociologists state that local societies will disappear along with the local business. The main reason for this opinion is that the end of local companies will result in a rise in unemployment. The joblessness will force many people to find jobs in other regions, leaving only a small number of people working in these malls. Despite this, supermarkets will be able to employ all jobless people in the region so as to deter the desire for abandoning the region. This can be achieved by involving many workers from locals in order to maintain large supermarkets and deliver products in time.
In conclusion, after analyzing, it is clear that although the spread of shopping malls may cause local business to terminate their activity, there is no threat to local communities because the link between business and society is negligible. In addition to the link, the appearance of supermarkets in the region may attract more investors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, apart from, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20723684211 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75444860213 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555921052632 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.123368211 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.071428571 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7142857143 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296574113614 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108492920733 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672777367536 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181144195055 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144184490593 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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