Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think that it is a waste of time.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In Kazakhstan, there is a concern in society about the importance of art subjects since they occupy more than 25% of the time children spend to study at school. This leads one to wonder whether these disciplines are important to teach at school. This essay agrees with the idea that art is redundant in school curriculum for the following reasons.
The first reason is that there are more important subjects to teach at schools. After they graduate, most young people get employed as engineers, economists and lawyers. Therefore, while they study at school, they should study more necessary subjects, including maths, physics and history, than music and literature, which have an insignificant impact on their future employment, so that they can compete with other qualified employees in the labor market.
Another reason why art subjects are redundant at schools is that they are impractical. Except a child is gifted in art, they, who constitute the majority at school, do not need to learn how to sing or play musical instruments, since they would have to work twice harder than talent children, if they wanted to get the slightest recognition in art. Therefore, they should put more emphasis on the subjects they are good at.
However, some artists claim that art is important to have in school syllabus. They say that by learning art subjects, children would know how to appreciate art. Despite this, I believe that children can master this skill on their own as part of extra-curriculum activities. Therefore, it is clear that children would waste valuable time at school unless they stop studying art disciplines.
In conclusion, pupils should stop studying art disciplines since they need to concentrate on more significant subjects that can improve their career prospects in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17064846416 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73521754943 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559726962457 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.457290259 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.214285714 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9285714286 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216135419062 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934207788981 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043588675326 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131694657269 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05471709522 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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