Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agr

Because of availability and convenience of the supermarkets, It has increasingly become more popular and people's priority rather than small businesses. Therefore, Some people argue that some countries' small businesses are not able to compete with supermarkets, as a result of this, they tend to shot down their businesses. In this essay i will discuss why this spread
may lead local shops to end up their works.

In terms of its reachability to people, because of their wide-spread location, local communities are effective. People will not need any transportation to go and buy some basic stuff from the shops, In contrast because small shops are not as remote as big shops, people choose to do shopping from the small shops which is just a few minutes far away from customers by walking.

Due to the fact that there are too many campaign, discounts, convinience, as well as opportunities people's choice more likely to be with supermarkets. Even though, It takes time to reach shops people purchase their need for months which they stock them into some storage even if the things are everyday needs such as bread, water or cigeratte. Because most costumers consider every single spending in order to spend less money. For example. When i was young, we used to go enormous super market which provides wholesale which means cheaper. Thus, Supermarkets appeal to people and attract people in many aspects of views.

In conclusions, Increase in number of supermarket will decrease the sales of local communities because they have more advantages which may result in merchants may tend to shotdown their business.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13962264151 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78940680376 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618867924528 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4345059386 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.818181818 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0909090909 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.90909090909 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195975380408 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646204870528 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473817191642 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105615588168 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203968167715 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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