Extreme or adventure sports are becoming more popular among teenagers. What are advantages and disadvantages of doing these types of sport?
Nowadays when people and especially teenagers are more and more under stress they need to realize how to cope with it. One of the ways to do it is TO UNDERTAKE extreme and adventure sports that are consequently increasing in popularity among teens. This essay will suggest that the destressing effect of these dangerous sports is the main advantage of that kind of sports for teenagers while the possibility to lose his or her life is a drawback.
First of all, when a person participate in a dangerous sport, he experiences AN UPLIFTING feeling due to the adrenaline released. When he or she feels that there is danger for their life exists all receptors in that teen body start working extremely well and then that person tends to forget about all the stress. Also, when the adrenaline is released it is most likely to remove stress hormones from your body. The AVL research SUGGESTSthat those children who regularly join adventure sports groups are 30 percent less under stress and for those who do extreme sports this percent doubles.
There must be something bad associated with something with that many advantages. When it come to extreme and adventure sports there is a risk of death during adolescents’ participation in it. Due to the fact that something extreme is always interconnected with a/the chance of death, it’s challenging to inspire yourself to start and even then, if a teenager is very scared during their participation, the chance to become dead is enhancing enormously. To prove it, there is AVL research that provides information on that theme:” there are 10% of teenagers dying during extreme sports events”.
Thus, participation in adventures and extreme sports can be advantageous for those children who experience high stress levels. But there is always a chance to die during the process.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, so, then, thus, well, while, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0495049505 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82078418265 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541254125413 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8344517331 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.692307692 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331253100889 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115252591568 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097051190559 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208800692668 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100510728292 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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