Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

In the fast growing world sports activity is very important for a person to accomplish the physical fitness but with some of the life threaten sports such as sky diving and skiing may become very dangerous for a person and government should apply strict rules or even sometime banned this activity. I somewhat agree to above statement. My position is justifying further.

The foremost reason, to support my opinion is regarding to the safety. To explain in details, some time safety equipment is not proper for some sports. In addition, luck of knowledge guide may leads to the higher risk. For children proper guidance is necessary and for adults also. This can lead to the some form of permanent damage to the person. For example, some athletes leave this sports because of the dangerous accidents.

Moreover, Government should also apply the strict rules to this sports activity. To add more, government may banned this activity. This is also helpful for society as well as nation. For instance, Germany banned the skiing in these country because of lots of death is happening to this sport.

On the another hand it is desire for some people to try this sports activity. More, some people wants thrilling and joy in their leisure time to doing this activity. Some time sport person can get a high rewards for this sports activity. Another reason is that some of them willingness to try at least one time sky diving or skiing in their life.

To wrap it all, without proper safety and guidance these can lead to accidents and make a damage in person's life. While other wants to enjoy their life without any fear and wants to try at least one time in their life. I believe that government should take strict restriction or banned this activity.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 118, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ccomplish the physical fitness but with some of the life threaten sports such as sky diving...
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Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...ome of the life threaten sports such as sky diving and skiing may become very dangerous fo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...er guidance is necessary and for adults also. This can lead to the some form of perm...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...d for adults also. This can lead to the some form of permanent damage to the person....
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Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...uld also apply the strict rules to this sports activity. To add more, government may b...
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Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... person can get a high rewards for this sports activity. Another reason is that some o...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...em willingness to try at least one time sky diving or skiing in their life. To wrap it ...
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Line 9, column 89, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'damage'.
Suggestion: damage
...ce these can lead to accidents and make a damage in persons life. While other wants to e...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, at least, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1455.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8178807947 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36300680259 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476821192053 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.3483598623 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.75 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217590631658 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0693866580767 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701652922079 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13905748833 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868941414014 0.056905535591 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.