Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on the idea that they are also responsible bringing up the children up .
Till the late 19th century,It was a thought that if mother has the decision power to have baby or not then it would be solely her responsibility to raise the kid. As the time progresses this thought needs to be improved in society. Having kid and its upbringing should not be the sole responsibility of mother, However, It should be a joint decision and efforts of both the parents. Children require both motherhood and fatherhood in equal proportion for their maturation and so , Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood.
To commence with , earlier it was the trend that fathers are more in to the role of bread-earner and that is why not actually indulged in the role of parent. To provide shelter and food should not be the only responsibility of any father whereas to look after the emotional needs of kid is also his responsibility. For instance, there are several occasion where a kid need his father with him for emotional support like any competition , parents meeting and so on.
Moreover,In today's competitive era, when both the parents are working, fatherhood comes handy to motherhood in childcare so that woman can manage both work and family life in better way. To come out from the hurdles of ancient trend that mother only get up early and get ready her child to school is going to become myth now. For instance , there are many leading corporate celebrity who are nurturing their child with support of their partner. Name a few, Chanda kochar,Pepsi CEO Indra Nooyi and so on.
Furthermore, kids learn from both father and mother. So, negligence from any of the parent can lead to create distance between kid and that parent. Slowly and gradually, kid will loose love and affection which can lead to many mental disorder in kids' vulnerable mind. So, for the better mental and physical development both the parenting is required equally to the kid .
All in all, I understand that having kids and their upbringing is very sensitive and challenging responsibility of life. It requires not only motherhood but also shadow of fatherhood to strengthen the base of kid's life. So, I strongly recommend that fatherhood should also be emphasised in our society.
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in better way.
in a better way.
there are many leading corporate celebrity who are nurturing their child with support of their partner.
there are many leading corporate celebrities who are nurturing their children with the support of their partners.
Slowly and gradually, kid will loose love and affection which can lead to many mental disorder
Slowly and gradually, kids will lose love and affection which can lead to many mental disorders
is very sensitive and challenging responsibility
is a very sensitive and challenging responsibility
Sentence: To come out from the hurdles of ancient trend that mother only get up early and get ready her child to school is going to become myth now.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to ready and her
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1769 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.717 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.687 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.026 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.55 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , It
Till the late 19th century,It was a thought that if mother has the de...
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Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly her responsibility to raise the kid. As the time progresses this thought needs ...
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Line 1, column 479, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...l proportion for their maturation and so , Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as m...
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Line 1, column 504, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...turation and so , Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. To...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...much as motherhood. To commence with , earlier it was the trend that fathers a...
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Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... more in to the role of bread-earner and that is why not actually indulged in the...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o provide shelter and food should not be the only responsibility of any father wh...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun occasion seems to be countable; consider using: 'several occasions'.
Suggestion: several occasions
...responsibility. For instance, there are several occasion where a kid need his father with him fo...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r emotional support like any competition , parents meeting and so on. Moreover...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , In
... parents meeting and so on. Moreover,In todays competitive era, when both the p...
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Line 5, column 339, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s going to become myth now. For instance , there are many leading corporate celebr...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Pepsi
...their partner. Name a few, Chanda kochar,Pepsi CEO Indra Nooyi and so on. Furtherm...
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Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... parent. Slowly and gradually, kid will loose love and affection which can lead to ma...
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Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...parenting is required equally to the kid . All in all, I understand that havi...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ting is required equally to the kid . All in all, I understand that having kid...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'whereas', 'as to', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257281553398 0.247107183377 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.138349514563 0.155533422707 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0631067961165 0.0946595960268 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0703883495146 0.0501214627716 140% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0436893203883 0.0437548338989 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114077669903 0.122226691241 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0266990291262 0.0403226058552 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78856932457 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0388349514563 0.0326793684256 119% => OK
Particles: 0.00485436893204 0.00163938923432 296% => OK
Determiners: 0.0873786407767 0.0861772015684 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0266990291262 0.021408717616 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0121359223301 0.011925033212 102% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2204.0 1933.35771543 114% => OK
No of words: 377.0 316.048096192 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84615384615 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20517956788 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.310344827586 0.374742101984 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.241379310345 0.28420135186 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177718832891 0.203846283523 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122015915119 0.137316102897 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78856932457 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.037074148 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519893899204 0.56093040696 93% => OK
Word variations: 56.713368382 60.7387585426 93% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0891783567 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9444444444 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0310139845 49.517814964 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.444444444 127.492653851 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.814263465372 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 3.99599198397 375% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.0823754789 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.57692307692 1.69124875643 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340455629549 0.332605444948 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102667278482 0.102741220458 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0549981687793 0.0668466124924 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527319183271 0.534860350844 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113738789514 0.148594505496 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131719116609 0.134430193775 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787698675442 0.0742795772207 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.325995409032 0.324371583561 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0685940635473 0.0638462369009 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222826671723 0.228012699653 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700081418212 0.058150111329 120% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.68436873747 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41683366733 176% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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