Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree?
To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?
Many films stars and music celebrities are living unhappy lives as we realize. They are in front of us and have everything that a human being can wish but they seem like unhappy and why are not they happy?
Money is a power and brings us every opportunity with itself. While we are sick and looking for the best treatment money is our friend, or when we choose a school for our kids we are seeking the best educational opportunities. Since we want the bests we need money. So we cannot say that money does not bring a happiness.
The problem with celebrities is that they do not have privacy and they are living like in competition. They always want to have the greatest, they always want to show and being in minds. They do not tolerate being forgettable. So they put their treasury into the center of their lives. However, if they forget that the money is not a happiness but what they can do with it brings happiness the situation might change.
Instead of competing with other celebrities with new expensive jewelry or newly bought helicopter, they can try to find happiness in other ways. Like maybe finding a meaningful purpose of life or helping others, trying to enjoy their holiday without sharing it, the rest that cares privacy and meaningfully actions can make them happy.
As I result, I can honestly say that, even if a celebrity does not have share everything and every moment of her life and can try to enjoy a life. Celebrities can have privacy, too and having a fame doesn’t have to make you unhappy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ing the best educational opportunities. Since we want the bests we need money. So we ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, however, if, look, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6336996337 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50639938247 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9240919586 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3333333333 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211096732095 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845794587606 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736716744975 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120722396638 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936779116547 0.056905535591 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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