Government should spend more money on children sport activities and art in schools rather than on a professional sport activities and artistic performances
To what extent do u agree or disagree?
It is thought by some that instead of supporting professional sporting activities and arts, the government should use its funds to support school children in sports. In my opinion, school children should receive this financial support because it helps them to build their athletic skills and encourages them to pursue a career in sports.
To begin, youngsters in school should be given financial aid over already established athletes because it will enable them to hone their inherent athletic abilities. With the proper training and guidance, these young ones could become highly skilled sportsmen or sportswomen in the future. To illustrate, if the government builds well-equipped sporting arenas such as badminton, volleyball and basketball courts in schools, a good number of pupils will be encouraged to make use of these facilities to develop their skills in these sports. In contrast, if the government funds professional sports and the arts instead, the potential in these children will be left untapped.
Another reason why sporting activities in schools should be prioritized is that it encourages children to build a career in sports. A number of these children may be passionate about becoming future athletes. However, this drive may fizzle out if it is not cultivated. In addition, some parents do not see a career in sports as lucrative, but if the government invests in it, they would be more willing to allow their children seek future career prospects in sports.
To conclude, it is my firm belief that the government ought to give priority to allocating funds to sporting events for children in schools instead of sports and arts on a professional level. Doing this would motivate them to become skilled athletes in the future
The sentences in bold seem to be repetitive. I think you should reword it to give a clearer view point.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, well, i think, in addition, in contrast, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1821192053 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81372211629 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506622516556 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.11897916 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.384615385 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92307692308 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257053592318 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10100544277 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920683418546 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151390800054 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701442273294 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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