The growing number of overweight people s putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involve. Some people that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum. To what extent o you agree or disagree?
With the increase in the population of people suffering with obesity has put a burden on the health care system as they have to deal with their health problems. Certain individuals have an opinion that the best way to curb this problem is by introducing physical education courses in the school curriculum. In my opinion, I do believe that by inculcating sports and physical activities in schools will eventually improve the health conditions of people and thus reduce the burden on health care.
Now a days with the advancement in technologies children spend most of their time playing video games and watching televisions leading to many health issues such as obesity, diabetes and cardiovascular problem. This puts a burden on the hospitals as they need more funds and infrastructure to cure these illnesses. By introducing sports activities in schools will make children physically active and healthier. To exemplify, more than 80 percent of the children are suffering with obesity issues because they are not involved in any physical activities or exercise such as playing cricket and cycling.
Furthermore, by introducing sports in school will develop a habit among the children for daily exercise and as a result the society will have physically and mentally fit younger generation which are generally the future of the country. If they are healthy the nation will grow as they will work towards the growth and development of the economy of the country. To elucidate, if parents are involved in playing sports and doing exercise they will be able to motivate their children to do the same thus leading to a healthy lifestyle.
To conclude, I vehemently agree that to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight people, changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing sport in schools is the easiest and most effective method to use.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...reduce the burden on health care. Now a days with the advancement in technologies ch...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, thus, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15081967213 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85508452751 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504918032787 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0461500441 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.818181818 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325313089978 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124752524803 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101862099028 0.0667982634062 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2026753336 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151919530945 0.056905535591 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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