It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future Do you think it is a positive or negative development

It is widely believed that the number of senior people will solely outnumber that of the young generation worldwide in the future. From my perspective, this phenomenon will exert a negative impact and pose a serious threat to the improvement of society as a whole. This essay will first give a plausible explanation, and then talk about its impacts on the human race.

First of all, the situation in which an increase in the number of elderly citizens compared to the youth will put heavy pressure on the government budget. This is because senior generation not only retires from the labouring workforce, but also being paid for their pension annually by the governments, which reduces the finance for other aspects of life. For example, the retired community in Vietnam has received a monthly pension since 2014, exerting a reduction in the total national budget.

Furthermore, this phenomenon has been a burden for the young generation recently, due to the fact that the youth has a huge responsibility to provide financially for their families, and therefore, literally no one at home to take care of their grandparents. For instance, Japanese housewives are usually responsible for the housework and caring for their children as well as their grandparents, while their husbands are the breadwinners, and thus these women cannot pursue their own careers.

In conclusion, the phenomenon of the aging population generally has been causing some bad impacts on the development of a community, which is a financial burden for their governments and their children.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20948616601 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92350142769 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592885375494 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.6963619902 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.444444444 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1111111111 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.6666666667 7.06120827912 222% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0693767315708 0.244688304435 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0368065682385 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424440817726 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0469887077009 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046054390368 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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