It is now possible for scientists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Thanks to the cutting-edge technological advancements, nowadays, having constant access to the distant natural environments is not easy for researcher. This alarming trend possesses both perks and drawbacks. Finding more habitable places for living and also economic growth would considered as the main advantages which , in my opinion, outnumber the possible disadvantages such as exposing to danger.
To begin with, while statistics can be refuted, there seems convincing evidence that population explosion, especially in some countries such as china, is a major cause of concern. A great deal of research has been done on the possibility of living in remote natural environment such as South Pole or unspoiled Islands like Bora Bora. Taking Tokyo, the most crowded city in the world, as an illustrative example. Due to significant rate of population growth, people have to live in tiny apartments which are not convenient at all. If building house or launching a factory would be possible it the South Pole, the density of residents in these megacities would decreased.
Secondly, the mentioned phenomenon in last paragraph lead to another concern. It is undeniable that in near future, we would confront with lack of natural sources. The number of water supplies or source of energy is decreasing considerably. Travelling to those remote areas might result in finding new resources. For example, new oil fields which have been found in the middle of deserts. Not only a vast number of fresh natural sources will be found, to meet the global demands, but also many job opportunities would be created. These two principal factors, consequently, would result in economic growth.
Admittedly, this opportunity may cause scientists to be exposed to dangerous situations such as attack of wild animals or harsh natural disasters like hurricanes. However, by applying some protective methods, the risk of danger would be eliminated.
In conclusion, it seems that the benefits of travelling to remote natural environments are more than those possible negative results.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
...r living and also economic growth would considered as the main advantages which , in my op...
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Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... considered as the main advantages which , in my opinion, outnumber the possible d...
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Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Bora
...as South Pole or unspoiled Islands like Bora Bora. Taking Tokyo, the most crowded city in...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'decrease'
Suggestion: decrease
... of residents in these megacities would decreased. Secondly, the mentioned phenomenon...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43343653251 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98491578143 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634674922601 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8744817547 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9444444444 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262378659064 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663199684944 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718646525442 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145985262483 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055022038803 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'consider'
Suggestion: consider
...r living and also economic growth would considered as the main advantages which , in my op...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... considered as the main advantages which , in my opinion, outnumber the possible d...
^^
Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Bora
...as South Pole or unspoiled Islands like Bora Bora. Taking Tokyo, the most crowded city in...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'decrease'
Suggestion: decrease
... of residents in these megacities would decreased. Secondly, the mentioned phenomenon...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43343653251 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98491578143 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634674922601 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8744817547 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9444444444 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262378659064 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663199684944 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718646525442 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145985262483 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055022038803 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.