Most of the times considerably the rising of the crimes, which is committed by teenager, are related to the violence of the media. I completely agree that the mass media focus on violent and sensational crimes and crime is one of the main subjects of most news programs. So we need to discuss the reasons and the effect of media on increasing the juvenile adequacies then the ways to prevent and solve this situation.
It is obvious that media have increased the crime because of two main reasons. Firstly, teenager tends to have role models. So if their favorite role model involves in gangs or was criminal, they would have been negatively influenced by them and consequently might commit a crime. Secondly, media is one of the most important parts of our life which we spend most of our time with. If the media's content was violence, it would affect our behavior and we would become depressed or disappointed and as a result of that we might encourage to commit crime to make our feeling better.
The solutions which have resolved the massive increase of juvenile adequacies is to enforce observation on the children and pay attention to age limitations. Children should use the media under their parent's observation and they have to be allowed to watch some kind of films for instance. Furthermore, parents should pay attention to age limitation of some kind of movies or generally using the media.
In conclusion, most of the time people believe that violence in the media is an acceptable reason for rising of teenager crimes. In fact several reasons are known nowadays, and media is one of the most discussable ones. We debate the effects and the ways to avoid the raise of the crimes above.
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- Popular events like the Football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tension and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. 35
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 537, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'committing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: committing
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258675078864 0.247107183377 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.154574132492 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0630914826498 0.0946595960268 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0378548895899 0.0501214627716 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0536277602524 0.0437548338989 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129337539432 0.122226691241 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0347003154574 0.0403226058552 86% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62786747098 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0378548895899 0.0326793684256 116% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.104100946372 0.0861772015684 121% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0220820189274 0.021408717616 103% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00946372239748 0.011925033212 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1708.0 1933.35771543 88% => OK
No of words: 294.0 316.048096192 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80952380952 6.12580529183 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319727891156 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248299319728 0.28420135186 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173469387755 0.203846283523 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119047619048 0.137316102897 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62786747098 2.80594681477 94% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.037074148 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513605442177 0.56093040696 92% => OK
Word variations: 51.2705846093 60.7387585426 84% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3419097179 49.517814964 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 127.492653851 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 45.8299319728 49.1944974215 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.71794871795 1.69124875643 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476681017725 0.332605444948 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.153197759614 0.102741220458 149% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0842734656287 0.0668466124924 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.622563445977 0.534860350844 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157985106314 0.148594505496 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.225911291213 0.134430193775 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107172269323 0.0742795772207 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351436406898 0.324371583561 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0431153897352 0.0638462369009 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.352981484506 0.228012699653 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826630754985 0.058150111329 142% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.68436873747 35% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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