More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Obesity is a worldwide phenomenon faced by most of the developing countries. Surveys shows that an enormous number of youth is primary suspect to this issue. There are number of reasons causing this health related issue, however, we will discuss few of them to further understand the problems associated with this issue.
Change in eating habits is one of the major contributor of this issue. It has been observed that people who rely on Junk food are majorly got effected by plumpness. This cause a number of issues related to health and particularly heart. Eating unhealthy food can add extra amount of carbs and protein in body consequently increasing cholesterol, weight, blood pressure and hyper tension. There is a kid in my neighbor who is very young but is suffering a lot of health problems due to his habit of eating snacks and beverages which harmed him in worst way possible.
Lack of outdoor activities and games is another reason of this problem. Kids, now a days are spending majority of their time in front of televisions. In third world countries, where kids do not have such facilities, they use to play outdoor sports which help them in maintaining their health. On the other hand, developing countries are providing numerous facilities to kids including but not limited to computers, video games, cartoons, videos, internet etc. to stay inside which is causing obesity in kids and also harming their physical and mental development.
To conclude, this issue is spreading on a fast pace and seems that it will become one of the biggest concern in coming days if not taken care of by government. Also parents should take care of kids specially when their health is on stake.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: in the worst
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Suggestion: a day; days
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
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Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, third, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1411.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91637630662 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62156166437 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620209059233 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.382614521 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1333333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170617127793 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566761170051 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528762684835 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998202067807 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473088883427 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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