Nowadays some older people choose to live in the retirement communities with other people, rather than living with their adult children. Is it a positive or negative development?
It is undeniable that elderly people play a critical role in our life. However, there is some debate as to whether older people opt to live in the retirement communities rather than living with their family. What I tend to believe is living in the retirement communities with their friends and medical staff is of critical importance for them.
Perhaps the great advantage of living in the retirement communities is a benefiting from medical opportunities. The aged care which has medical facilities for elderly people provides the best health conditions. By and large, the most of elderly people have some health issues. For example, the older person may have some health issues such as hypertension and heart disease, who live in the aged care are supervised by medical stuff routinely. Their medicine or inspection is implemented on-time. Due to their routine supervising by doctor in the aged care, the risk of being sick is reduced. It is therefore clear that choosing to live in the retirement communities is healthier for elderly individuals.
Another beneficial aspect of the living in the retirement service is a making friendship. In other words, elderly people could feel alone and unhappy in their home. Living in the retirement communities could be an opportunity for socializing. To illustrate, the older individual who live in aged care may be friends with other elderly people. Thus, they may organise many events such as music and dance show. it could a good opportunity to feel better.
Overall, it is clear that retirement communities may give second chance to feel better to older people. It is significant that not only aged care giving healthy life but providing also social life to older people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...our life. However, there is some debate as to whether older people opt to live in the retirem...
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Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ny events such as music and dance show. it could a good opportunity to feel better...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, such as, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1447.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11307420495 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79123762947 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498233215548 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.6322270384 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3888888889 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7222222222 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377999780315 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122512492145 0.084324248473 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117194842886 0.0667982634062 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242903849931 0.151304729494 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136465223375 0.056905535591 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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