The number of older people is increasing. Some people think it will cause a problem to their countries, others believe this group is important to society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The growth and development of technology in the healthcare sector have brought a paradigm shift which has increased the average life expectancy of human beings. Therefore, a section of society asserts that the ageing population will have harmful effects and impede the economic growth of a nation, while others believe that this age group is also pivotal for the country. I agree with the latter and think that all the age groups, ranging from the juveniles to the elderlies, are crucial for society.
The people who consider that the aged population is a liability of a nation substantiate their claims by proposing that the elderlies will consume tax payer's money and intensify the depletion of resources, exerting pressure on the younger generations. Once people reach the retirement age, they have no other means of earning and thus, depend entirely on a pension provided by the government, which is mainly collected by the existing workforce of the nation. Furthermore, aged people require not only the basic amenities but also specialised care to sustain, thereby causing their children or the community services to cater to their needs while they are unable to produce anything fruitful. The lenient immigration policies of Canada for the younger generations because of the growing aged population of Canada illustrates the detrimental effects of older people on the economy of a country.
Nevertheless, from an enlightened standpoint, even the older generations persist a lot that they can offer. For one, the elderlies are much wiser who have attained a colossal amount of experience in their lifetime. Thus, they can impart knowledge to the younger generations, teach them about history and also assist their families in making informed decisions. For another, neglecting the elderlies would not only be inhumane but will also violate the fundamental human rights. The older population have already paid their dues, and hence, it is now their time to live in harmony along with their families.
To conclude, indubitably, there are certain challenges in serving the older people; however, being a part of a civilised society, it is our duty to provide for every age group and build mutual understanding with them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g with their families. To conclude, indubitably, there are certain challenge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26890756303 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77895148959 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577030812325 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.4676991019 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.692307692 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170622495902 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574726010068 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327392920992 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964250930906 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312189005187 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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