Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities.To what extent do you agree?

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Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities.

To what extent do you agree?

A section of society asserts that children should not squander their precious time on reading a colossal amount of children's storybooks; instead they should invest their time and energy on other resourceful activities. I agree with the assertion that children should get involved in different activities for overall development, besides just reading fairy tales.

At an early age, reading stories not only teach discipline and good habits in a child but also impart life lessons in them. The stories written in the children's books are specially articulated in a way so that it is easy to comprehend and imbibe even for a preschooler, whereas if children tried to read a course-book or an article on a specific subject, it would be too complicated for them to gain any useful insights. Furthermore, the habit of reading books from a young age improves not only the listening skill but also enhance comprehension skill. According to a recent study, it has been proved that the children who read regularly end up performing well in academics and are better at logic building skills than their counterparts.

Nevertheless, from an enlightened standpoint, the process of children's growth is much more complex and require them to perform a host of mental and physical activities. Therefore, for a healthier lifestyle, children should be encouraged to follow a fitness regime by adopting sports, such as cycling, badminton or football. Pursuing a sport would not only enhance the fitness level of a child but also build some of the key attributes, like teamwork, patience, planning and coordination, in them, thereby leading to a successful life and career.

Hence, in my opinion, learning from reading storybooks is acceptable as long as it is done in moderation while focusing on other vital facets of a healthy lifestyle that is needed for all-round development of a child.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 409, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...fitness level of a child but also build some of the key attributes, like teamwork, patience...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18032786885 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96233817454 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616393442623 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.3905745155 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.0 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243257905549 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086494094126 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624950450013 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126444156832 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702319027611 0.056905535591 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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A section of society assertions that enormous time spent on reading storybooks by the children is of no value, rather the same can be applied for more resourceful activities. I agree with this, as children should also get involved in different productive activities which is more holistic in their development rather than just reading storybooks.

Children are fascinated by various storybooks because of simplistic articulation of the message with an attractive storyline of their interest, which in return, entices them to read and eventually gather a good command on vocabulary and comprehension. It also helps them in improving their thought process, moreover, when they grow old, they recapitulate the same and explore on to a variety of books and expand their horizon of knowledge. Apart from that, it aids them to gain wisdom in various domains to become a better human being and become more successful in future.

Nevertheless, they also need to study, spend time with family and engage in physical activities like playing with friends to gain social skills which are very crucial for their complete development. Firstly, family bonding is vital as they acquire values from their parents which is important. In addition to that, different outdoor activities like playing any sport, which not only improvises their physical health but also enhances other key talents like negotiation, coordination, planning and communication abilities.

To conclude, in my opinion, learning from reading storybooks is acceptable as long as it is performed in moderation while also focusing on other vital aspects of wholesome grooming that is needed for all-round development of a child.