Obesity is becoming more and more common not only in adults but also in children. School, parents, and government should be taken responsibility to help improve that.
There are three reasons that contribute to the obesity of children. Firstly, a large number of parents are both working parents. They may not have time to prepare and cook food for the children. Instead, they choose fast food, like frozen pizza or fried food for meals. Most fast foods contain excessive sugar and calories that are too much to be digested by children. They remain in their body and further cause obesity. Secondly, the entertainment of fast food is very attractive to children to purchase. The fast-food companies would not care about the nutrition level of their products but put most of the effort to make them look fancy and attractive. Lastly, because of the development of social media and online games, children tend to stay at home to play games online rather than going out for physical exercise with friends.
There are three ways that we can do to help children stay healthy. Firstly, the parents should put more time and effort into children's meals with the consideration of nutrition level. Secondly, the school should educate children on healthy dietary habits building and provide more physical exercise opportunities. Thirdly, the government should raise the standard of the fast foods that are potentially available to children with more strict standards of sugar level.
Ultimately and most importantly, everyone should take responsibility to help children be away from obesity and other potential harm.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...te to the obesity of children. Firstly, a large number of parents are both working parents. They ...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to fast'
Suggestion: to fast
... for the children. Instead, they choose fast food, like frozen pizza or fried food f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21153846154 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62963032027 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580769230769 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2293881732 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6875 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211822102432 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801068528544 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707871735301 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149828907201 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359354011012 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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