At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large no. of young adults compared with the no. of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large no. of young adults compared with the no. of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, many countries have the population majoring in young people than the old ones. In my opinion, this may bring more obstacles to nation development.

On the one hand, young countries may have a few benefits with a large workforce. They are in young ages which means that this is the best period to have good health in physics and mental to distribute to the national economics. Another advantage is that the welfare for the elders is not cost much as well as health care plans for old patients are also easy to managed and spent less money.

On the other hand, these countries may face a lot of issues at present and in the future. Too many young people will be an obstacles if the government cannot handle job issues for them. They need good training programs and job opportunities to not become the unemployed. Besides, accommodation and health care for birth also a big problem while having many young adults in the country. Last but not least, these young laborers will become old people and then welfare is going to be a burden in national finance.

In conclusion, young population countries have more matters to worry about such as occupation, places, health care and welfare for the elder in years to come. The government need to be a great leader to manage and solve all of these issues.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an obstacle' or simply 'obstacles'?
Suggestion: an obstacle; obstacles
...e future. Too many young people will be an obstacles if the government cannot handle job iss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1088.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68965517241 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45439982032 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 176.041082164 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547413793103 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 334.8 506.74238477 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.163547081 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133520628132 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526513891196 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415265372498 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860692723001 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175564497664 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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