Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the government, rather than by private companies. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
The incredibly fast pace of technological growth, and consequently the recent commercial break-throughs achieved by scientists has drawn several private corporations’ attention into making huge investments in scientific research. However, this upward trends appears to be under fire by those raising doubts as to whether the private sector is competent enough. Personally, I tend to align myself with the group advocating government’s domination over research related to critical issues.
On the one hand, there are some people subscribing to the idea that strongly advocates private firms effective co-operation in conducting studies. It is often argued that organizations which are being run by private shareholders benefit from higher degrees of freedom when it comes to decision-making; thus, scientists’ studies are more probable to lead to desirable results. A further argument in favour of private sector’s intervention in scientific areas might be the public concern regarding the amount of money being spent on dead-end research. A sizeable number of people explicitly condemn the government for the so-called squandering of the national budget on investigations which utterly failed to meet their specified objectives.
Although opponents’ argument seems to be sensible to a certain extent, I tend to refute any further engagement of private companies in research, especially those of vital importance. One serious hazard interwoven with mandating corporation to carry out essential studies would be the lack of transparency in private sector. There is no practical measure to appraise the real upshot of corporations’ collaboration. In addition, some companies might try to conceal their failures so as to maintain their reputation; hence, there is likely to lose both time and capital without reaching a positive result. Moreover, greed can sometimes pervert companies of their main cause. An illustration of this could be Afex Corporation, having figured out potential profits involved with their innovative drug, they ridiculously increased the price of their products; thus, this vital medicine has slipped of less affordable families’ grasp.
Taking all above-mentioned points into considerations, it does not seem far-fetched to arrive at a concluding view that although there are some rational arguments against government’s domination over scientific research, we should not explicitly deny the risks involved. Given to what have been mentioned, I strongly support government’s predominant role in all principal studies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...o be under fire by those raising doubts as to whether the private sector is competent enough....
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ies might try to conceal their failures so as to maintain their reputation; hence, there...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94117647059 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.48431733213 2.80592935109 124% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652406417112 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9472834168 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.133333333 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9333333333 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165846114637 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523794187338 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460133773705 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964056513868 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145150652033 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.0946893788 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.47 12.4159519038 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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