Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.Why is this?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.
Why is this?
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Undoubtedly, shopping has become one of the main leisure activities throughout the world, especially for the youth. Following essay will list out the possible causes of this trend and then expand on my views, which are totally negative in nature.

The main reason behind the current youth turning shopaholics, is the over influence of celebrities in the recent times. Unlike earlier times, people today are easily inspired by the celebrities through social media and observe their consistently changing fashion and style statement. Take for example, nowadays every Newspaper covers their changing Airport looks, their Gym looks and even their swimsuit looks. As a result, people especially young adults, are lured towards the latest fashion trends in the market and always find their existing wardrobe as boring. Secondly, most of the youth today have taken part-time jobs to increase their pocket money. So they get habitual to spending a lot rather than, saving. Websites like, Amazon, flip-card and even e-commerce of late have been thronged by teenagers with requests ranging from the latest glares to formal attires. Hence, this kind of over-consumerism is the prime cause of youth desolation.

The impact of youth spending most of their free time shopping and following fashion trends is surely a negative development, as they remain unfocused towards their career goals of life. Furthermore, they may take up to fashion not out of choice, but out of peer pressure. So many Indian parents of late have observed their academician children’s grades taking a plunge as soon as they start going to universities. Secondly, there are many who cannot afford to follow latest fashion all the time, these students land up having an inferiority complex. Such college students remain depressed as they are judged and sometimes are bullied by other students because of their old style and stable dressing sense. Thus, it is quite evident, had there been less influence of fashion or shopping in students’ lives, they would have been more career-oriented and compassionate by nature.

To conclude, social media and celebrities regular fashion updates makes the youth shopaholics and indulge in wasteful expenditures during their leisure time too. Further, distracting them from reaching their career goals and leaves them suffer from inferiority complex.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'follow the latest'.
Suggestion: follow the latest
...ly, there are many who cannot afford to follow latest fashion all the time, these students la...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, kind of, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42547425474 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72851148716 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59891598916 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6446244026 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.222222222 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0990826681583 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332800391181 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437133655302 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074893669788 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641279876386 0.056905535591 113% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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