Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both the views.
IN RECENT TIMES STUDENTS ARE ENCOURAGED TO WORK PART-TIME WHILE THEY ARE STUDYING.THERE IS NUMBER OF ADULTS WHO SUPPORT THIS AND ON THE OTHER HAND, THEY ARE PEOPLE WHO DISAGREE WHIT THIS APPROACH.IN THIS ESSAY I WILL DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE MY OPINION WHY I SUPPORT THE FORMER.
TO BEGIN WITH, THE PEOPLE WHO SUPPORT TEENS WORKING PART-TIME ARGUES THAT IT WOULD HELP THEM TO DEVELOP THE FINANCIAL DISCIPLINE.FOR EXAMPLE MAJORITY OF THE STUDENTS WHO WORKED PART-TIME JOB ARE BETTER IN HANDLING MONEY IN COMPARISON WITH REST WHO DIDN'T WORK.SECONDLY, STUDENTS WHO WORKED WHILE STUDYING WILL HAVE A EDGE OVER OTHER IN SECURING JOB ONCE THEY ARE DONE WITH STUDIES BECAUSE THEY ALREADY HAVE SOME JOB EXPERIENCE AND ALSO REQUIRE LESS TRAINING THAT OTHER STUDENTS, THIS RESULTS IN COMPANIES CHOOSING THEM BECAUSE OF LESS TRAINING COST INVOLVED IN HIRING THEM.
ON THE OTHER HAND, THERE ARE PEOPLE WHO ARGUE THAT WORKING WHILE STUDYING IS WASTE OF VALUABLE TIME WHICH COULD BE SPEND STUDYING AND SECURING HIGHER GRADES IN EXAMS.IN THEIR VIEW WORKING WHILE STUDYING WILL DISTRACT STUDENTS AND TIRED THEM RESULTING IN LOWER GRADES AND JEOPARDISES THE STUDENTS FUTURE.IN THEIR VIEW RATHER THAT WORKING PART-TIME JOB it's BETTER TO ACQUIRE MORE KNOWLEDGE BY STUDYING VARIOUS BOOKS.
IN CONCLUSION, I BELIEVE THAT WORKING WHILE STUDYING IS BETTER FOR TEENS BECAUSE IT TEACHES THEM FINANCIAL RESPONSIBILITY AND ALSO HELP THEM TO GAIN SOME JOB EXPERIENCE BEFORE HAND SO THAT ONCE THEY FINISH THEIR STUDIES THEY CAN EASILY FIND A JOB.
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- In many cities today, most people live in large apartment blocks. Does this kind of accommodation have more advantages or disadvantages? 67
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- IN SOME COUNTRIES, TEENAGERS ARE ENCOURAGED TO DO PART-TIME JOBS BY SOME PEOPLE. OTHERS DISAGREE.DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION. 56
- Some countries encourage teenagers to have a part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both the views. 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 170, Rule ID: BEFORE_HAND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beforehand'?
Suggestion: Beforehand
...O HELP THEM TO GAIN SOME JOB EXPERIENCE BEFORE HAND SO THAT ONCE THEY FINISH THEIR STUDIES ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1288.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.152 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.512420347 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 387.9 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 62.0 20.2975951904 305% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 127.213403382 49.4020404114 258% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 322.0 106.682146367 302% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 62.5 20.7667163134 301% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 23.75 7.06120827912 336% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18059425108 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120542289274 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036430154379 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120542289274 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036430154379 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.1 13.0946893788 260% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 8.55 50.2224549098 17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.5 11.3001002004 243% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.48 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.07 8.58950901804 129% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 9.78957915832 286% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.8 10.1190380762 265% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 10.7795591182 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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