Some people believe that government should take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire Others say individual should save during their working years to fund their own retirement What is your opinion Give reasons for your answer

It irrefutably true that grey haired people need financial support to cater their needs such as medicine and so on, that;'s why some individuals of the society think that financial aid should be given to the grey-haired ; however, others admit that elderly can save money for their golden age. My views are in the favor of latter views but I also think that government should give assistance up to some extent.

Elderly public should be funded by government, first and foremost reason is that grey-haired people have paid taxes to the government when they were doing job in their career, therefore, they should be returned in their last phase of life as pension. To cite an example, in UK, aged inhabitants are gained financial support after completing 60 in order to take medicine, expenses of transport and accommodation. Furthermore, people not only contribute for the betterment of the society but also gave help in the holistic progress of the country as a result, fund may be allocated for elderly people.

On the other hand, people can save small amount of money when they were employed, firstly, if any person earns a amount, he/she may invest in shares , debentures as well as can deposit in the bank as monthly installment which can be met in their personal expenses. These savings may offer independent livings and do not escalate the burden on the authorities as well as on the children.Last but not least, providing other facilities is infrastructure, road services, health care and so on, government unable to offer financial aid to the grey-haired. Despite this, elderly expense can be taken by their children because parents give many sacrifices in order to nurse their child as a consequence, children can take their parents responsibility on their own shoulders.

To encapsulate, after mentioned all above information, it is abundantly clear that certain amount should be offered to grey-haired people by government as pension; however, individuals can hold this responsibility by saving certain amount of money when they were earning. Both government and individuals can take concrete steps in order to maintain elderly life without tensions.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04261363636 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75567449624 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519886363636 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 352.0 20.2975951904 1734% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1775.0 106.682146367 1664% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 352.0 20.7667163134 1695% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 130.0 7.06120827912 1841% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317623905403 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.317623905403 0.084324248473 377% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204549121435 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486395371076 0.056905535591 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 178.3 13.0946893788 1362% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -285.8 50.2224549098 -569% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 140.6 11.3001002004 1244% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.43 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 24.33 8.58950901804 283% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 9.78957915832 541% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 142.8 10.1190380762 1411% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 143.0 10.7795591182 1327% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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