The issue of whether or not people should try to improve their situation has been a heatedly discussed topic in recent years, and this has turned into a dilemma facing many. Some people believe that people should adopt the poor situation they used to be in while others do not agree. Personally speaking, I would assert that people need to make efforts for a better life.
Admittedly, being less stressed is perceived as one advantage of accepting an awful situation. For instance, if a person does not care about how much money he earns every day and tries to adapt to this, he will not feel any pressure when he cannot afford the thing he wants to buy. There may be a chance that even though people work hard for a better life, they do not receive the result that they wish to. This will lead to a huge depression in their future time which will affect his work, his health, even bring this bad mood to the people around them. However, this does not necessarily imply that people should never try to improve their unsatisfied situation.
In fact, making efforts for a better future can make people get a feeling of achievement after they reach their goals. For example, if a person was used to be in life with a shortage of profits and he earns lots of money after the works he has done with his efforts, he will spend his money more carefully and meaningfully. This will help him to make more money in his future time and treasure the comfortable life he has at the present. Moreover, if all people in society work for a better life, the economy in that place will be facilitated and much happiness will be spread between people.
To recapitulate, both two views have their pros and cons, but still, I maintain that it is better to try and improve the bad circumstance, as its beneficial effects outweigh the rest.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue of whether or not people should try to improve their situ...
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Line 2, column 533, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...his health, even bring this bad mood to the people around them. However, this does not necessarily imp...
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Line 4, column 102, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... still, I maintain that it is better to try and improve the bad circumstance, as its be...
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Line 4, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s beneficial effects outweigh the rest.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1494.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54103343465 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35984522103 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544072948328 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.9001531403 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.923076923 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175329374495 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709830998814 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497961636749 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12715485981 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589195411824 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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