Some people feel that entertainers are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Nowadays, while compare the salary of different people, someone claims that one who works in entertainment normally has a higher paid than in other métiers. In my opinion, meanwhile their income is on top, this is not too much when comparing with their efforts.
Frist, everyone is paid for their contribution to the society. Entertainers, to become famous, they need to make a continuously effort. In fact, before archiving any success, everyone had to practice and improve their talent day by day. For example, sport stars often start their career at a small club, then by working very hard, they are interested by bigger teams and finally they become the stars.
Furthermore, the amount entertainers earn, in comparing with the figure that an even with their participation, is always smaller. This comes from the fact that the entertainment industrial develops around the stars. An instance illustrating this fact is that every entertainment companies need to sign contracts with the stars to ensure that they are the only one can collect money in their performances. What is more, in order to keep the image every time they appearance before the fans, the stars need to pay a vast amount for shopping and dressing. That can be assumed that whereas they earn a lot, they need to spend more than others.
In conclusion, taking these points into consideration, I’m inclined to believe that sport or music stars are paid in equal with their contribution. In the future, with the development of the society, their work could be more difficult, then they should make more effort to continue their successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('continuously') instead an adjective, or a noun ('effort') instead of another adjective.
...rs, to become famous, they need to make a continuously effort. In fact, before archiving any success,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, so, then, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1351.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05992509363 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76397389351 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.588014981273 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5543495578 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.923076923 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0965830254359 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388203966429 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341900038612 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0676625894671 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035580494114 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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