Some people say that the best way to improve public health us by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, improving public health is a controversial topic that generated a great deal of heated debate. While some people maintain that it can easily resolve by develop more sports facilities, in my opinion, many different measures are required.
At the outset, nobody can argue that sports facilities don’t have any effect to public health. An instance illustrates this action is the fact that many public parks equipped with sports facilities are helping residences to exercise and stay more healthy. Moreover, exercising is the easiest way to improve one’s health because nowadays the number of people practicing sport is increasing significantly. Particularly, there are a vast amount of young people don’t want to do exercise. As the result, to improve public health, this is a need of solutions to make people more active.
However, since public health depends on various elements, more solution should be adopted. First, government has to control the quality of food. In fact, many diseases come from the food. For example, toxic food may be the cause of cancer. Another point to be taken into consideration is pollution. Actually, people can decide the food they eat but no one can make sure that the air where they are living is clear. What is more, population affects a larger area than other factors. Hence control population is a difficult task that the society needs to deal with to protect people’s health.
In conclusion, taking these points into consideration, in a personal perspective, I’m inclined to believe that many actions are required. The government should undertake the responsibility to lead the overall society to improve public health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... more sports facilities, in my opinion, many different measures are required. At the outset, ...
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Line 2, column 446, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...icantly. Particularly, there are a vast amount of young people don't want to do e...
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Line 3, column 482, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...fects a larger area than other factors. Hence control population is a difficult task ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32835820896 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85215250149 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623134328358 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4479978791 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7647058824 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285360000733 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842439378286 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739576615578 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174126593965 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691452314892 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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